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Sistahood


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Nice to see Taji Mag on the boards here on AALBC. Nay and Troy are both in NYC and should build. In regard to the poem, it's really a statement written in poetic form. I like the sentiment, and power, but as poetry it lacks imagery and a use of the senses. We should always be able to see, feel, smell and touch the poem. A line like "Different sizes, shapes, colors" is telling. A rewritten line like

Her shoulders wide enough to carry him

Her hair captures combs no matter how careful (see the alliteration)

We are different sizes, shapes, colors

Actually makes the poem alive and active.

 (That's the old professor in me coming out.)

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