Guest Paul L. Leach Posted January 16, 2016 Report Share Posted January 16, 2016 This is poem I didn't post the first time. Rape You raped me stole thoughts and feelings I had hidden releasing inhibitions, feelings imbibed in my spirit warm, wet, fetishes like your tongue parting my lips invading my soul making me victim to love a word too simple to describe my feelings of your penetration ejaculated rhythm a pain so sweet it's syrupy, sticky-jismish glow stains sheets every tomorrow I'm alone Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Troy 2,739 Posted January 16, 2016 Report Share Posted January 16, 2016 Paul, your account has been approved. If you post using your account you will no longer has to wait for me to approve it before it shows up. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Shirley Gale 120 Posted January 16, 2016 Report Share Posted January 16, 2016 This is a powerful and sad expression of an act that violates the soul. i hope your words are used in healing somehow. Thanks for the courage to share it in its raw essence. 1 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Cynique 2,308 Posted January 17, 2016 Report Share Posted January 17, 2016 Hummm. Just goes to show how we do create our own truths. This poem struck me as a lover's metaphoric reminiscence, more about unleashed ecstasy than painful violation. Oooooh, well back to my napping ...z z z z z z z z z z Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Shirley Gale 120 Posted January 17, 2016 Report Share Posted January 17, 2016 As a reader, rape connotes violence and robs me of any ecstasy in the act. The title took me there. There are rape victims who did not come forward initially because they admitted to being aroused when they were being victimized by that sinful lust. I guess this is where my mind went. That's poetry for you. It's all up to interpretation. We do indeed create our own truths. On another thought, I wish I hadn't hit that lowercase i in my response. I certainly know better!!!!! Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Shirley Gale 120 Posted January 17, 2016 Report Share Posted January 17, 2016 1 Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Cynique 2,308 Posted January 17, 2016 Report Share Posted January 17, 2016 This poem is ambiguous, to say the least, an exercise in mixed emotions, even making reference to being vicitimized by the inadequacy of the word "love" to describe what is taking place. I find it curious and presumptuous that a man would even write a poem about rape from the perspective of a woman. His inability to be objective would of course, lead him to perceive rape as a secret desire of women - thereby creating his own truth. Then, there's always the possibility that this work is about a homosexual encounter between 2 men. Brrrrrrrrrrrrrr. it's cold out. ZZ ZZZ ZZZZ.... Quote Link to post Share on other sites
Paul Leach 0 Posted January 18, 2016 Report Share Posted January 18, 2016 Thank you ladies for reading and commenting on my poem. Ms. Cynique's initial interpretation of my poem was just about spot on. This poem was written as part of a short story I wrote, where the main character was so in love with a woman that "rape" was the only way he could express his feeling when she left him. I wanted the poem to come off as if he'd been violated, but still very much in love with her. Ms. Gale, I apologize if my poem evoked any harsh thoughts towards the piece or me, as a person. Quote Link to post Share on other sites
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